*Feedback and Reflection on First Pitch

Year 12 film pitch feedback group 2

Individual Reflection

 

From looking at the feedback I understood everything that our teachers and other group was suggesting. We will be having a meeting on Monday to discuss all these point and present another treatment as we did not successfully get a green light, however we didn’t get a red light either; just need improvements. Here is what I thought about our treatments presentation.

• ·         Firstly we hadn’t presented ourselves correctly through the choice of words making us seem uninsured about our decision for our distributor “Miramax”. We used the word niche and they didn’t understand why Miramax would be distributing us. We was meant to say Miramax distribute stylised/indie films, and even distributed one of our main inspirations Kill Bill

• ·         We also forgot to add in one of our main inspiration kill bill which just showed we wasn’t ready to present ourselves.

• ·         The story plot seemed very confused as previous ideas were brought up, about her becoming an assassin because of revenge but it becomes too complicated. So her story would be that she just became a professional assassin through the government.

• ·         We hadn’t spoken about titles weather its will be superimposed of cutaway. This brought confusion and yet again made us seem unprepared. I think at the end of that discussion we will all want cutaway titles, as it will make our sequence more of a film than a TV drama.

• ·         We had an issue on how the main character will cover her tracks; we agreed that she would need gloves.  I’m not too keen on her having a mask, which is more for robbery.

• ·         We also need to look into music tracks; we all know we want stylised music such as classical music.

• ·         There was a lot of questioning on the mortality of our main character, I see here as a flawed heroin as she is seen as evil at the start (very cold) but through the movie we see her struggle to do right and defeat the baddies.

• ·         There was also a discussion on our main scene where the man gets shot. We were asked if we had researched into how this would be done which, we will now.

From this meeting we have realised there is still a lot to discuss and make clear. Hopefully when we next give the treatment we will present it well and get a green light.